deadken posted:
pictured: a thing
littlegreenpills posted:i'm doing a workshop and i have to somehow critique this while being polite and constructive
From Chris:
Most of you know this is an adaptation of Pride and Prejudice into a Star Trek novel Prime Perceptions which is the story of the meeting of Spock’s parents, Sarek (Darcy) and Amanda (Elizabeth Bennet).
Amanda has grown up and Sarek has recently crashed on a planet in a system with electrical dampening.
Sarek and others have been working on methods to get a probe out of the system and have discovered a way to temporarily create electricity.
Amanda’s sister has run off with a supposed Vulcan, ‘V’Kham’. Amanda knows V’Kham is really a terrorist Romulan and they all fear her sister may be killed. In Chapter 47, I add a description of the beginning of Sarek searching out V’Kham to fight him. I’d like input as to whether the pacing and voice of these inserts works well enough with the simple translation of the rest of the story.
Some have commented that made me feel like they thought I was writing a good period piece but it's supposed to sound like Star Trek and not like Jane Austen so I'd like to know if it sounds sufficiently unlike Jane Austen.
Thanks,
Chris
by critique i assume you mean steal the idea and get it published yourself
http://samkriss.wordpress.com/2012/08/30/the-mirror-stages/
deadken posted:I WROTE A DUMB GAY THING ABOUT MIRRORS
http://samkriss.wordpress.com/2012/08/30/the-mirror-stages/
hmm that was kinda cool, was yusef 3 and 4 related
EmanuelaOrlandi posted:ken write a thing that isnt dumb or gay by saturday or i will ifap u
no Lol
did you creatively write thsi , DRU
somebody probably already made that joke sry
SHANK3Neuropathy posted:...and boy are my arms tired!!
somebody probably already made that joke sry
ok:
If you look closely, the princess archetype is not about passivity and decorativeness: It is about power and the recognition of the true self… What other female figure can command an army, break open a treasury, or even, as in images of Kate Middleton or of Diana Spencer, simply bestow, with her presence, a sense of magic, excitement and healing?’
the book i'm releasing is about the french revolution. this is the little agent blurb i had to write:
At the height of the terror, a young French aristocrat evades the guillotine by preying on the Jacobins' ideals, sentiments, and prejudices. He constructs his own biography three times, for three separate judges--each time, the truth of his past and his circumstances comes closer to entrapping him. A French Book proceeds entirely in speech and is set in two dungeons and an office.
now show us the progress on ur beard
Impper posted:last time i put a book here i gave it to 30 or so people and asked for reviews, if possible, since i didnt care about the piddling amount of money, but would have liked reviews. i got 0 reviews that shit was kewL
I’m sorry I’m lazy Impz, I just don’t know how to do like, proper criticism and review.
I did actually buy F&D though.
Ironicwarcriminal posted:Impper posted:last time i put a book here i gave it to 30 or so people and asked for reviews, if possible, since i didnt care about the piddling amount of money, but would have liked reviews. i got 0 reviews that shit was kewL
I’m sorry I’m lazy Impz, I just don’t know how to do like, proper criticism and review.
I did actually buy F&D though.
that is not exactly the point of an amazon review. it is ostensibly a conversation with other customers more than literary criticism. i got a review on fuck and destroy that alleged that i'm a rapist with no writing ability and since then i've sold a lot more books than i was before that one.
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